Monday, September 26, 2011

Urzu Durkut

Rahul continued to stare outside his window as his hand moved in auto pilot mode to dial her number.
The Vodafone number you are trying to reach is currently unavailable. Please try again later, said the firang voice for about the one hundredth time.

‘Damn you, Vodafone!’, he thought. The irritation made him want to wring every single ZooZoo’s throat except that- well, they don’t have a nose so it kind of means they must breathe from their pot shaped bellies or something.
Any thought however nonsensical, didn’t help him get rid of the question that lurked at the back of his mind for what seemed like an eternity now,
Would she come?
If the possibility of rose petals pulled out could give a conclusive answer, he would have done that too but as you may know plastic tulips are the closest to nature that you can get in a reckless bachelor’s apartment.

It was in the hope of seeing her that he had come to pass the opportunity of an extravagant lunch buffet treat by one of his colleagues. Some choices plainly hurt to pick. Floating images of barbecued seafood, delectable desserts and dribbling friends entered his mind. Whether it was misery from hunger or their exaggerated expressions that soured more was difficult to tell.

The intestines in his stomach crunched, churned and cringed as he kept alternating his gaze from the cuckoo clock back to the window. 2 o clock had been agreed upon and here it was five minutes late already.
As his anxiety progressed, he made a mental resolve. Despite the baited wait, if she chose to overlook his request to grace her presence today, their relationship needed some serious reworking.
With each passing second the acrid flavour grew at her insolence.
What did she want?
What was it that lacked?
Why didn’t they share the same bond that he had seen so many others do?
Too many questions.

His subconscious stayed lost in thoughts, while his eye still fixed at the window caught a glimpse of her accentuated kohl lined eyes.  A sense of relief washed over him. All negative vibes disappeared as he waited for her to get to the door of his apartment.
He didn’t want to complain or crib. She was here and that was enough. For the both of them.

As she neared the door, a hint of fragrance from her gajraa lovingly adorned on a fierce bun floated all the way to him. On turning to face her, she waved her Max Mobile handset in his face and briskly trashed the doormat.
The light of his life had finally arrived.
Let’s hope you’ve guessed it right! :P


JaLpArI - tHe MeRmAiD said...


What a twist gal....
ha ha ha!!!

i was eagerly waiting to see what happens to his love story....

ha ha ha!!!

äмän ♥ said...

Awww this is lovely <3 =D
love the pic

Arjit Srivastava said...

I am confused, really. What did I miss, here? Damn, the twists. :p

Daniyal Arain said...

lolwut? :P

Rahul said...

I didn't quite get it... :-(

Sadiya Merchant said...

@ jalpari- hehe happy hearts fr u <3 <3 <3

@ aman- thnx! :)

@ arjit- uhh wel d post was fr indians. d last tym i chekd u wer an alien. dat xplains it? :o

@ daniyal- mine is a real xpression in kashmiri :P

@ rahul- areyyyy!
mayb u shud try readin d last para again.
n dis tym lemme help u
gajraa+ fierce bun+ max mobile+ trashed d doormat=???

subtlescribbler said... this was wat u were working on? kyaa twist 'aayah' hai :p

wen i started reading it...and read 'rahul' i thot it would some cute, mushy SRK movie type love story..but ye to real life story bann gai! :O

cool hai :D


Bikramjit said...

aing mav mobile and doormat what they got in common ..
yeh ho kya raha hai .. OHT ho gaya madam ji :)

what am i guessing here ahhhhhhhhhhhhhh I am so DUhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh sorrry


Shobhit said...


The first thing that came to my mind on seeing the title was that song from the movie 'Yahaan'. Dunno if you have seen it. :-)

Lovely post. :-)

Rinaya said...

Hehehe...imagine missing a sumptuous meal for the sake of that gajra.. :P
As usual loved ur story!

Rahul said...

gajraa+ fierce bun+ max mobile+ trashed d doormat=a clueless Rahul
I still don't get it...but anyway,since every1 else got it,I take it I must be missing something here....

Cloud Nine said...

Hahaha!!! Super twist in the end, typical Sadiya style:P Late aa gayee, lekin aa gayee na? Memsaab ke liye tho wait karna padtha hai;)))

Arjit Srivastava said...

That explains it better than anyone ever has tried even. Respect. :P And please, do let me know the real twist, whenever you reveal it, I'm still curious. #FuckAliens

Suruchi said...

oye-was he waiting for the kaam waale bai to come n make khaana?

PeeVee said...

:D rotfl...
If it's what I think it is, there goes my dream of a perfect love story.
But even the twist, I'd imagined something else:P

Arjit Srivastava said...

Aa gaya samajh mein, finally. Abe, yaar. Hadd hoti hai twists ki bhi. :p

Binu Thomas said...

Nice twist in the tale !! You were leading us very well yaar, and then the sudden twist.. Funny indeed...

I also liked the Vodafone Zoo-zoo's description, made me think how do they actually breathe :D

Shahzeb Md. Danish said...

My favorite writer in recent times...(Extra marks given for being a lady off coarse...)

Sadiya Merchant said...

@ sarahhh- hehe comment modulation ke liye *applause*
twist to banta hai na. bn so longgg :)

@ bikram- uhh! vilayti mundey!! *rolls eyes*

@ shobhit- exactlyyyy!
dats whr id hrd it d frst tym n den lukd up d meaning. beautiful song, beautiful movie. watchin it mks me feel like i soooo wanna go to kashmir xcept dat emm i don wanna die or nethin.

@ rahul- lol. itne halogen bulbs ek saath kabhi nahi dekhe!
on a serious note, try readin d odr comments n ull certainly get it :)

@ niveditaa- hehe haa ye baat to correct hai. par memsaab bohot high maintenanc hai.

@ arjit- lol. soooo i assume finally aapka vimaan antriksh to laad bazaar pohoch hi gaya. bhelcumm!

@ suruchi- mere attempt at subtlety ka vaat lagaane ke liye thnx :D

@ priyankaaaa- rest assured its nt a love story.
n arey waah! imagination ke andar doubl imagination. nw im imaginin wat u may hav imagined. no success :(

@ binu- u kno wat. i jus HATE zoozoos. dey r manhoos! :o

@ danish- hehe thnx man.
n ya don remembr d last tym i saw a guy sharmaofying so much in his dp :D

me0me said...

Accha hai!

Blasphemous Aesthete said...

hain? Itni bekadrii? Aaya ko nikaal do, agli baar time pe nahi aayi to bas, fire her.


Nice post, I was clueless for a whopping five minutes before I got the last para into my head.

Blasphemous Aesthete

Maham said...

haha..:p nicely tackled..
you mostly write stories right?but while you were describing I had a feeling that she maynot be her lover :psee..I guessed it.yay!

Muhammad Israr said...

ahahahahaha...poor boys... no matter how much we resolve and vow, but all it takes is a jhalak of kohl eyes or a scent of gajra and everything else is forgotten :) nicely written...yeh life hai :)

Bikramjit said...

saying vilayati munde and rolling eyes wont HElp .. will it :)

aaaageeee bolo ..


Priyanka Kamath said...

hahaha..! This was fun :D

The comments are funnier.. Halogen bulbs all around, eh ? :P

Okay a confession here, I was clueless for a good 180 seconds before I read it again and got the catch.. whew.. thank god :P

Nice post :)

Sadiya Merchant said...

@ rinaya- thnx n shorrie fr d late reply. ur comment decided to mark itself as spam :P

@ me0me- chalo thnk God! hum to darr hi gaye the :o

@ anshul- lol. aaha fire kaise? fir kya kaam aap karenge?

@ maham- hehe. gud job! n no stories r a recent fascination.

@ muhammad israr- uh oh :o
the burning question is- r u dere yet? :D

@ bikram- bolna hi tha to kabka keh dete naaaa. mayb bday grl's comment mite help u. ab ye mat kehna who bday grl

@ priyanka- lol. dint xpect d post to turn into a puzzle like thing at all!
thnx btw n welcum to d blog :)

Muhammad Israr said...


hahahaha...sssshhhhhhh :P

♥●• İzdiher •●♥ said...

Hey Its amazing .

Princess of The Dreamland said...

:) Loved it... You simply are awesome... when is your book coming? I def want a copy of it.. :D

Kaash itna intezaar koi humara bhi karta kabhi.. but no... i don't want to b the one, for whom he was waiting .. ;)

Sadiya Merchant said...

@ muhammad israr- :)

@ izdiher- thnx!

@ princess!!!- my book? *gulp*
if uve read d latest review n browsed thru d comments or d percieved controversy over it, dis wud b terribl timin to ask :D
alredy itna wait karwa diya. ab aur kitna karwaaogi bechaare se????